by Karrie Platfoot, 2009, graphite, 10 x 8.
You might want to know that this self-portrait was drawn by a high-school student. I was impressed.
The mood, gesture of the body, and expression are all presented very well in this drawing. In order to bring even more intensity to the piece, I would recommend simplifying the drawing in two ways. First, I suggest eliminating the stripe on the pants, or at least making it more subtle. The other area where I would recommend simplification is on the shirt. We are all tempted to over-model the wrinkles in clothes because it is easier to render the folds than to find the body underneath. In this case, some elimination of wrinkles or reduction of the contrast will help define the plane underneath.
The painting adjusted by the critic to
illustrate her suggestions.
About the Critic
Dawn Whitelaw has studied painting with Scott Christensen, Cedric Egeli, Jim Pollard, and Everett Raymond Kinstler. In 2002 she received the Award of Excellence and Best of Show in an international competition sponsored by the Portrait Society of America, and she has exhibited her portrait, landscape, and still life paintings in juried shows organized by the Cumberland Society of Painters, the American Academy of Women Artists, and the Phoenix Historical Museum.
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